Term 3 Week 4

Tena koutou nga tamariki o ruma rima,

Ticket Designs

Thanks to all those who drew designs for the show tickets! They were amazing.  I'm glad I don't have to choose.

Descriptive Writing

You are all working so hard on improving the descriptive 'wow' words in your writing  AND your use of punctuation to help the reader read it as you want it to be read!

Here are a couple of Maui descriptions for those who have finished.  Please read them and  make a comment about something you think you have improved with in writing this term!

Describe this moment

with the

best ‘Wow” words you

can

Maui swung the magic jaw bone of his grandmother wildly and it landed silently in the deep ocean.

Suddenly, Maui's fish caught the fishing line.

"What was that?" asked Maui's brothers desperately. No answer came from Maui.The waves started splashing and crashing. Our waka started filling up with water as the fish came up to the surface of the deep ocean. It twisted, flipped, turned and crashed but luckily we didn't fall off. "Maui, THAT WAS THE MOST DREADFUL TIME OF MY LIFE!!!!!!" screamed Maui's brothers.

By Myiesha

As the boat started  to frantically sway and stir, Maui started  to fight with the fish. “Maui! Maui! Stop tugging. You’re  going to get us killed!” But Maui didn’t stop tugging. The enormous,black fish rose out of the water. It was smooth as a white board. As Maui nervously stepped on to the great fish, he told us that he was going to get his hook, and he said not to hack the fish.When Maui left … we started to hack the fish with our paddles.

by Edward

Suddenly,the rough waves started to sway and stir us around wildly. Maui and his brothers were petirfield with the vicious waves howling around them. “Maui, let it go!  I need to  go back to land. I don’t want to get us all killed!” All of a sudden something big,black and shiny rose out of the waves. Maui and his brother tugged on the rope with all their might but then they could not hold it for much longer. The rope was going to snap. “Stop stop! Let it go we don’t want to be the fish’s dinner.” They stop tugging and waited for a whole night ,but then the fish came up to the sea. maui said do not hack the fish but,they did do all the rowing. So why can’t they have some of  the fish they said  let us go get are fish. As soon as muei come back they hack the fish and made big dense  in the fish. “what have you people done to this fish?”A  few days later  enormous  waves and then it made there waka stuck , so they had to get on the top of the waka but,they froze to death.  

by Jemima

Shared writing.

I also thought we did well on our first Shared piece of writing on  our Google Drive,especially when we checked it!   

  

WALHT use punctuation when we describe characters   

Your task is to add on a great sentence to this class description of this

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“Now my brothers!” he shouted, and the magic ropes snaked through the air. They tangled in the sun’s fiery hair. “Are you going to keep me here forever?” cried the sun. He touched the flaring sun with his magic jawbone. Its fiery hair loomed around its huge body. Maui started pulling with all his might. Maui started to smack and beat fiercely on the front of the giant, boiling sun. Ra cried in anger with pain and mercy. But Maui kept bashing Ra with the magic jawbone. "Ouch! Stop it! You're hurting me and that's enough!" shouted Ra. Ra pulled himself back but Maui pulled tighter. "When are you going to let go of me and what have I ever done to you?" shrieked the sun. Maui pulled tighter and forced the sun. “Slow down!” screamed Maui loudly. Fiercely, Maui banged the magic jawbone down on the sun’s forehead. Bam! Pow! Slowly,the sun went down.  From that day on, the sun moved slowly across the sky.  Now people around the world have enough time in their day to do all their work.

  Art - Koru Patterns

We need to practise this pattern as it is a very important pattern used by Maori!

It comes from the young fern plant - pitau.

Here are some designs to help you.